Saturday, September 20, 2008

Lead Exercise #2

Yesterday, a US Air airplane crashed directly into the ground outside of Pittsburgh as it prepared to land. The rash killed all 131 people on board and was flying in from Chicago. This crash is the worst in the United States in the past 3 years. 
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1 comment:

camccune said...

Don't start with your lead with the "when" or "where" of a story. Start with the most important and/or interesting info, generally the "who" and/or "what" of the story.

The news is that 131 people were killed in an air crash, but you don't tell me that until your second sentence. The news needs to be up front in the opening sentence.

three years

7.5/10

September 20, 2008 at 8:52 PM

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