Sunday, November 23, 2008

Real-Life Reporting News Story (REVISED)


Deep in the heart of the Silicon Valley, along the painted concrete blocks of San Jose State University's Cesar Chavez plaza, the political force of Hip Hop music is heard. A crowd formed in the plaza, political figures and local celebrities gathered on stage. These individuals partaked in the Voter's Registration Rally put forth by the Silicon Valley Leadership Group, co-sponsored by San Jose State University and West Valley College. Many prominent political figures were amongst those in attendance, including California Secretary of State Debra Bowen, and San Jose Mayor, Chuck Reed. The city of San Jose hopes that this event will increase voter awareness of local propositions and encourage voting amongst the youth. Administrative Assistant to the Associate Vice President of San Jose State Public Affairs, Marisela Hernandez stated, "This is a great opportunity for the city of San Jose and the state of California to reach out to young voters."

The event began with a keynote speech was given by Mayor Chuck Reed. Reed did not endorse any candidate but did stress the importance of voting for local propositions which are vital to our city. While discussing the local propositions the Mayor said, "voting for our next president is important, but don't forget the local propositions at the bottom of your ballot." After the Mayor finished his speech, several members of the San Francisco 49ers hit the stage; this gained much interest from the students. Delanie Walker, tight end for the San Francisco 49ers, stated that the youth will decide this years election, "we need to get the word out to the youth, so they don't miss the boat this time."

In closing, California Secretary of State, Debra Bowen, reminded all students to take part in this year's historic election, and asked those who aren't registered voters to register at the registration table set up along the plaza. This event brought together various people from all cultures, ethnicities, and political affiliations, yet regardless of political views or party affiliation, all in attendance encouraged everyone to head to the polls this November.

1 comment:

camccune said...

Better. But keep it simple:

These individuals took part (not "partaked") in the Voter's Registration Rally hosted (not "put forth") by the Silicon Valley Leadership Group....

Instead of "Many prominent political figures were amongst those in attendance," just say "Many prominent politicians attended...."

36+5=41/50